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A Queen of Blood

Narrative Poetic Novella.  Excerpt - Chapter I: Naomi 

She was alone and lost, and he was kind.

He offered her a ring, and her hand shook

as, gently, he slipped it on her finger.

She had never felt the cold kiss of gold

against her peasant flesh before that day

when she became the king’s favored betrothed.

With doting eyes, he promised her the world.

She knew he could give it. The thought scared her

and excited her at once. Girlhood dreams

realized. Out of poverty came mercy.

Security, the sweetest gift of all,

he offered her, in taking her as bride.

She, obscure shadow that she was, echo

forgotten on a breeze, sweet, simple girl

with haunted eyes, subsisting on mere dreams,

would be queen.

                          It did not feel real to her.

Even as the king held her calloused hands

as she floated into his fine carriage

buoyed by surreal hope, and disbelief.

Even as he brought her to his palace

and warmly murmured, ‘Welcome home, my dear,’

and they reclined before the hearth, like friends

as he, ever kind and earnest, asked her

questions no one before had cared to pose.

Her past, her dreams and fears, he tried to gauge

through his affectionate attention, but

she was so unaccustomed to being

acknowledged that she hardly knew how to

reply. Yet he was patient, and in time,

she came to trust him with her thoughts, her mind,

her heart and soul as well.

                                        She liked the way

that the brazen firelight danced in his dark

eyes, the color of grief and loneliness,

that shade, both unwelcome and endearing

in its familiarity. It seemed

their fireside talks each night before they wed

coaxed light, and with it, life, back to his heart

until his eyes sparkled again, even

in dark. She could not know how she lit up

his imagination with lustful hopes.

He felt again a youth, in love and lust

when he gazed at his maiden fiancée,

pure in her rustic rural loveliness,

with a kind heart that beat in tune with his.

Both broken, aching, yearning to be loved

and love.

               And love her he would, pamper her

with roses, red like blood on virgin snow

and ruby jewels that lay, cold and heavy,

at her throat. Silken gowns, and golden crowns,

and a fine, tall mirror, gleaming crystal,

which he had bestowed with a love-struck smile.

“Now you can see the beauty that enchants

a king. Naomi,” he murmured, “I am

spell-bound by you. Let us wait no longer.

Sweet one, marry me, tomorrow.” he begged.

She sought his dusky eyes, and saw his need.

His devotion and faith, hunger, and hope.

She could not tell if there was love. She had

no experience to recognize it.

But she recognized the want, hope, and dreams,

so she nodded, and he enveloped her

in his muscled arms. Slowly, she breathed him,

Scent of man, of soap and smoke and aged youth.

It did not feel real to her. Even as

the servant girls, her servant girls, draped silk

and lace, and threaded pearls through her thick locks

where pine needles and petals used to cling.

Even as pipe organ music pounded

in her mind, like bizarre thunder. Even

as he gazed, and a smile, the first in years,

peeked through his regal beard to encourage

his bride, who trembled like a frail white birch.

Even as his warm, soft hand greeted hers

and lifted her immaculate white veil

beneath whose daintiness she did remain

a browned peasant girl who had known much grief.

Even as he kissed her for the first time,

to claim her irrevocably as his,

and his whiskers scratched her tender pale lips.

Even as he placed the rich, weighty crown

upon her brow, bellowed “Long Live the Queen!”

And his subjects – hers, too, now – cheered loudly

but whispered amongst themselves their disdain

for the wild commoner. How absurdly

inappropriate, that their dear, great king

would take a peasant as bride, and so young!

With swarthy skin, and acorn colored eyes,

and charcoal hair. Woe! Sweet Queen Eliza,

of golden locks and eyes emerald green,

would die of shame - to see her faithful king

bed such a woman, let alone crown her

with the diadem that she had worn first -

were she not already cold in her grave.

It did not feel real to her. Even as

their hateful whispers echoed in her ears.

Even as her royal groom whisked her out

of the church and to the carriage and he

squeezed her hand, fondly kissing her bare neck

as they approached the castle. Even as

the minstrels played and nobles spewed phony

compliments like toxic honey for the

newlyweds as everyone drank, feasted,

and danced at the wedding banquet. She saw

more food than she had known existed; but

she could hardly eat.

                                Even as she felt

him take her hand and gladly lead the way

to their bedchamber, aglow with candles

and she heard him lock the door. Even as

he carried her to the bed. Even as

he shed his coat and belt, and stroked her neck

and hair and arms and back and face and lips.

It did not feel real. Only numb.

                                                   Until

she felt him break her vulnerable flesh.

Pain pierced the very depths of her. The dream

over now, forever. Was this marriage?

She had never known the body of man.

No one ever told her the mystery

of summer twilights, of lovers at dusk.

She had not expected anything but

to be embraced and caressed as he had

done before, and she had borne, in quiet

contentment, void of lust, happy only

to be wanted. But this electric shock

raced through her nerves, and she could bear no more.

She sobbed and pushed against his heaving chest.

At her resistant cry, he pulled away.

He looked at her, his lust dissipated

as he saw her tears. “My love!” he murmured,

disturbed by her grief, shocked and ashamed to

hear the way she wept. He had not meant harm…

Had no one warned her, of a virgin’s ache?

His tender bride, his angel of new hope

recoiled from his touch.

                                       “Dear Naomi!”

He rolled over and smoothed away her tears

though she shrunk from his hand. “Forgive me, love.

I swear to soothe the damage I have done.”

His voice was tender, empathetic, warm.

“I love you,” he swore, “and I seek to please!”

With husky murmurs, he sweetly crafted

a requiem for virgin-hood.

                                         His queen

heard nothing. The peasant girl thought only

of the vibrant crimson drops she had spilled;

such scarlet had poured from her father’s chest

on the battlefield, turning grass to rust.

He had thrown himself at the enemy

to protect the king, and welcomed in him

the foreign sword that pierced right through his starved,

unarmored peasant frame. It had killed him,

but not before he had murdered his foe

in final, fatal vengeance. He tumbled

to the ground, at the feet of the shocked king

who knelt beside his doomed savior subject

and cried, “Thank you, my friend…My poor, good friend!

Tell me, what is your name?” Her father smiled

his last, grimace-like grin, as he sucked air.

He clutched his king with the last of his strength.

“Find my daughter,” he breathed, “provide for her.

Naomi is her name... Sweet Naomi.”

He had laughingly sobbed,

                                         then gasped,

                                                            and died.

Blood red. Blood red.

                                 The memory haunted

the king, who was noble and true. He sought

to find the maiden. When at last he found

her dwelling, sequestered in the forest,

he could scarcely believe that anyone

could live in such a place, isolated,

with wolves for neighbors, and only the moon

for light. A drab little cottage, of wood

and mud, and a sad little weed garden.

He had found her at the well. When she saw

him, on his white horse, and armored, and crowned,

she stared, wide-eyed, but said nothing.

                                                             His heart

pounded as he observed her. He had thought

she would be a child, a girl in two braids

prancing through an apple orchard, her Ma

chasing after her, laughing. Before him

stood a woman, cloaked in sorrow and fear,

who seemed to know, before he gently told,

that her father - her only kin - had died.

Her eyes were hunted, and haunted, and lost.

She was quiet, but in her heart turmoil

brewed like a winter storm. He asked after

her mother, and she whispered she had died.

She had no siblings. She was all alone,

Shivering, barefoot, and with dirty hands.

He could not look away from her. Her grief,

her violet twilight heartache, cast a spell

over him, for he recognized the ache.

But there was something sweeter in her looks.

He saw in her wide eyes, like deep-set gems

her tremulous lips, and dew-moistened locks,

a beauty, rough and picturesque, and new…

And he had known then, that he never could

marry her off to some nobleman, or

give her money and leave her in these woods,

or make her a lady’s maid. He knew then –

from the way she held herself, quietly

poised, and yet wild…

                                   gracefully ferocious

like a majestic wolf that stares into

your soul to see if you are friend or foe –

that he needed her, as she needed him.

Without the faintest quick heartbeat of doubt,

he offered her himself, his greatest gift

his heart and hand and crown. She accepted.

And here they were, husband and second wife.

Brought together by murder, then by lust.

Her father crowned her by his sacrifice.

Now they were sealed together in blood, twice.

Blood in, blood out.

                                As he kissed her, she lay

lost in her thoughts, imagining the woods,

pretending his whiskers were the needles

of the pines she buried her face in when

she felt all alone, and tasting apples

on his lips, which smelled like ale and longing.

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Thank you for reading this excerpt from my newest work-in-progress, "A Queen of Blood." A novella in narrative poetic form, "A Queen of Blood" re-imagines the Snow White tale in a way you've never read before. Immerse yourself in the classic story through the eyes of Naomi, a young, melancholy peasant girl chosen by the widower king as his bride. Become a part of the intrigue as wide-eyed Naomi navigates a tumultuous relationship with her step-daughter, Blanche - a manipulative, seductive young woman hungry for power. Drama, romance, and blood-thirst combine in this surreal retelling. 

Details as Requested 

Working Title: A Queen of Blood

Genre: Narrative Poetry, Romance, Suspense, Fairytale

Age Range: 16 + (due to some sexually suggestive and violent content)

Target Audience: Poetry readers & fairytale lovers ages 16 + (most likely female)

Author Name: “Lenore” (aka, M.C. Please inquire privately via Prose message for full name, age, and hometown, or contact me at mmc75911@gmail.com)

Bio: I am an undergraduate student of English Literature and Government, and a part-time classical soprano. I currently study at Dartmouth College and write for the platform Prose. I pride myself on my diligence, attention to detail, and intellectual curiosity. My writing consists mostly of poetry, including free verse, metric formal, tanka, and haiku, but I also enjoy writing prose in the historical fiction and fantasy genres. My hobbies include classical singing, Irish dance, and academic tutoring.

(c) Lenore, 2017. 

Photo Credit: Sonam Kapoor (I do not own this image)

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Notes:

This is my first go at a project of this type, so I'd love to hear from fellow writers/readers about whether this is something you would be interested in reading in full. I realize that narrative poems aren't for everyone, and this piece is especially (and intentionally) surreal and bizarre, so I hope you will check out some of my more mainstream works if this isn't your cup of tea. ;-) I consider this "formal" verse, but it is not intended to be metric. There are, however, 10 syllables per line. Thanks so much again for reading!

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