I need y’all’s opinions on something...
So it’s been a while since I’ve been to a studio. With the pandemic restrictions lifting, the one I was using is too booked to get back into, so Mom and I have been searching for a new one. And we found it. Hopefully this one will be less popular so I can maybe get in more. I have a song ready to pitch if I do go, and it’s something I’ve posted on here in the past, but I’ve altered a few of the lyrics to lyrics I like way better. I’ve also recorded an amateur scratch vocal—with only my iPad mind you, no mic, no fancy equipment, just my voice and silence. So if it’s good, cool, and if it’s abominable, that’s probably why. My request is that you check it out and give feedback, in two regards. One, is it original. I don’t think I’ve ever heard anything exactly like this; but I’m really suspicious because this melody feels too good to not be taken. I’ve been checking around, making sure I haven’t subliminally cribbed it off Lana. Results have been favorable, and I think I may be safe. But me being one person, I can’t watch every music video in existence to double check, so I figured asking around would cover more ground, since everyone’s musical taste is different and everyone has a different knowledge base of songs. Anyway. Two, is it good. That one kind of speaks for itself. And like I said, the music isn’t there yet, that’ll be what the guy at the studio does, so it’ll be up to my voice alone to carry the melody, but it’s pretty concise and defined so that shouldn’t be too hard.
So...without further ado. (And I’ll also post the lyrics in case anything’s unclear.)
Lyrics:
You were never bad news.
So I thought that it was safe
to elevate my heart into
that long-awaited place.
A past full of mistakes.
My civil war you severed.
You held me in your eyes.
We were the best together.
Of fairy tales and broken shells,
we walked along the beach,
under a cloudless denim sky,
the stars within our reach.
Oh.
You pick me up and spin me ’round.
Swaddles us inside this dream.
Can’t be seen.
You build me up, you tear me down.
Emotions come and now I’m bound.
Darkness surrounds.
Spiraling down.
We drove on up the boulevard,
and I was feeling dead,
while a thousand happy branches
held hands overhead.
What had I become to do this?
What had I become to stay,
inside this cage of gold you’d made?
Gasps of sunlight flitter down.
But I can’t feel them now.
No.
You pick me up and spin me ’round.
Swaddles us inside this dream.
Can’t be seen.
You build me up, you tear me down.
Emotions come and now I’m bound.
Darkness surrounds.
Spiraling down.
You pick me up and spin me ’round.
Coddles us inside this dream.
Can’t be seen.
You build me up, you tear me down.
Emotions come and now I’m bound.
Darkness surrounds.
Spiraling down.
Spiraling down.
Spiralin’ down.
Emotions lose and I break out.
Freedom surrounds.
And my feet kiss the ground.
Also, for reference, the genre is probably gonna’ be slow lounge. Just an acoustic guitar strummed, or, something.
Also also, no promises I’ll follow through and go to the studio, but I kinda’ really want toooo...
Song isn't autobiographical btw. It's just a song :)