"There there, all better now." The woman sighs over you, patting your knee gently as he stands to put away the first aid kit.
"I think it's time for a nap," She says, picking you up slowly, as not to reinjure your scraped knee. As she carries you off to bed, you see the mice on their tricycles begin to play. They play all kinds of games, those mice. They toss bread crumbs around as though their mothers had never told them not to play with their food. Back and forth, back and forth, the crumbs go flying through the air.
The mice play soccer ball with the stolen marbles from your collection. The marble rolls towards the woman, and unaware of its presence, she slips and falls. You go flying through the air for what seems like hours, only to land softly on the green wooly carpet. Leaving the room, you retrieve the first aid kit off the kitchen counter. When you return, the woman lies still, bleeding out. You place band-aids over her wounds, pat her knee, and whisper.
" There there, all better now."
Hi there! My name is Madelynn Marshall. I am in midle school. My hobbies are writing, reading, drawing, and ord building. I mainly write in secind person, though sometimes I swith over to third. I have been writing, mainly poetry and short stories, for a while now. As for my target audience, it would be anyone who enjoys suspenful writing with a deeper meaning.
This is my short story 'Mice Talk'. My story uses a form of wrting called 'Circular Narrative'. I think this form of writng adds a cool suspense to the story. In the writing, you meet character A, who is protrayed as " The Woman". From the few lines that you here from her, you can kind of gather that she is a sort of mother figure in character B's life. The next character you meet is character B, protrayed as " You", is written in second person. The whole passage is based off of these two characters interacting, one who speaks and the other who rarely does. The last set of characters you meet are the mice. The mice symbolize a sirt of barier between the woman and "You". Through out the middle of the story, "You" seems to be the only one who can see them mice.
The hook of the story is also the end of it. You witness the woman take a fall the ends up being fatal. Upon this, "You" goes into the kitchen and graps the first-aid kit, the same one used to mend his scrapped knee at the begining of the story. "You" even repeats the same phrase used when his scraped knee was being take care of.
Thank you for listening! I hope you enjoyed "Mice Talk"