My WIP: Treachery at its Finest (sampler)

Hello, friends of Prose. I am working on a book for Nano and I am planning on publishing it on KDP. I know this chapter is very long, but if you get the time to read and give some feedback it would be much appreciated. I would love to hear your views on the story, the formatting, the punctuation, wording or whatever. If you’d like to comment it here you can, or if you’d rather tell me personally in an email, you can send it to OssandraWhite@gmail.com. Thank you so much for all your help! God bless you. <3

Link:

https://theprose.com/post/368005/chapter-one-troubled-beginnings