So, WorldAnvil is like a HUGE wiki for your world, and I never know where to start, so I LOVE when they have challenges. The challenges direct me to work on a certain area of my world. This time, it was an Alliance challenge. There are a lot of cool looking articles I’ve seen, and I wanted to know what I should maybe do to improve mine. Mine is nowhere close to complete, and I know one of the main things I should add is a cover photo. I am currently in the process of drawing that.

But, if there’s anything else you notice should be added or changed, commenting it below is greatly appreciated! I know I should add much more, but my brain has so many other things jumbling around inside it!

Link to my alliance:

https://www.worldanvil.com/w/Wynsumheord/a/the-mundbyrdian-sceadu-of-sundorwick-organization

If you need context, feel free to ask questions! Also, you can take a peek around my world. None of the articles are really complete though. Also, I have some canon stories on theprose.com.

I appreciate your help! God bless you.

@LexiCon, Hi. I hope you may find something among these small suggestions. <3

Typos: misspellings:

- reamained - in Structure (should be remained).

- privelege - in Assets (should be privilege).

- weilding - in Assets (should be wielding).

grammatical - in need of healing etc., - (should be in need of healing, etc.) (Add a comma after healing) in link to Sundorwick Forests under heading of Tourism However - this is actually not a place to use "etc." UNLESS you add more items to the list preceding the word "etc." Here is the sentence as it stands: "Some curious folk may trek to the mysterious location due to the wonder and thrill of lore suggesting it is home to fairies and sprites, while others who have learned of its mystical plantlife may come to collect special botanicals if they are in need of healing etc., or if they have intent on selling the rare finds in the market." It would need something such as "... others who have learned of its mystical plantlife may come to collect special botanicals if they are in need of healing, "attracting a mate, purging oneself of poison," etc., or if they have intent ... " Since this sentence is very long, you might consider breaking it up into two or three shorter ones.

Also in link to Sundorwick Forests under heading of Tourism:

Some people long ago tried to utilize Sundorwick for lumber, but the forest's soldiers taught them better than that.

I would reword the end of the sentence to more precisely state the forest's soldiers taught:

"but the forest's soldiers taught them 'to do' better than that." (Add the words 'to do'.)

In Stucture, you note that 'weapons' of choice Sceadu remained: (typically crossbows or bows and arrows). Because these are two distinct weapons, consider making it more obvious by stating "crossbows and bows and arrows"

The only significant changes were the fact that now there was more open communication with the Mundbyrdians, more participation in meetings and events of Wynsumheord, and more battles fought that did not personally affect the Sundorwick Tribe.

I would reword as "Significant changes that there were more open communication with the Mundbyrdians, participation in meetings and events of Wynsumheord, and battles fought that did not personally affect the Sundorwick Tribe."

Public Agenda

After much speculation, the Firgenholt came to the conclusion that the Sceadu were getting too close to the Mundbyrdians, so, at the wedding of Magnar and Anselma, they ambushed and attacked all in attendance.

I would reword to help the flow without altering the meaning to this:

'getting too close to the Mundbyrdians; so at the wedding of Magnar and Anselma, they'

History

Firgenholt did not appreciate the Sundorwick inviting Wynsumheord 'so close to them'.

I would change to a more familiar phrasology, such as:

Firgenholt did not appreciate the Sundorwick inviting Wynsumheord 'into such close proximity'.

Demography and Population

I feel this is a grammatical typo. You have:

But, since the merger, some citizens of Wynsomheord have decided to take up residence...

You need to remove the comma after 'but' because I think you actually mean to say:

'But since the merger,' some citizens of Wynsomheord have decided to take up ...

Territories

I would omit the second "now" to avoid being redundant. (It's implicit that it's now.)

Now that the Sundorwick Forests are officially declared a district of Wynsumheord, and the Sceadu have become Mundbyrdians, they now technically have a hand in all territory except the Firgenholt Wood.

It would then read:

Now that the Sundorwick Forests are officially declared a district of Wynsumheord, and the Sceadu have become Mundbyrdians, they technically have a hand in all territory except the Firgenholt Wood.

Curious topics I would like to have elaborated:

- certain plants that can help in the process of vanquishing an enemy. in Assets

I later found this info by following your link: "Because of this, the Sundorwick Soldiers tip it on the edge of their arrows and darts before going into battle." I wonder if the soldiers "tip" the Slumaberry sap on the edge of their arrows or "dip" it. Perhaps they tip it, or it could be a potential typo. Only you know what they do with the sap. :-) This is such an interesting practice that perhaps a brief explanation could be made in Assets.

- the forest peoples did not consider their land to be part of the main settlement due to their varied philosophical views. in History

This is more fully explained by following the links. A short overview of one sentence might be welcome since this is the variance in philosophies is such a major difference that it led peoples to disassociate with one another. (Or perhaps you could expound with a sentence or two about each of the varying philosophies.)

I'm not super familiar with WorldAnvil, but am always up to learn about new things.

In looking over the alliance information, most of the plot and dynamics seemed really straightforward until you got into the history and demographics sections. I would love to know more about the cultures of the two tribes, why they are compatible with eachother but not the Firgenholt, and relative population sizes. Are they matriarchal? patriarchal? democratic? What were the philosphical beliefs that they shared? How do the tribes play a role into the world as a whole? You mentioned the Wahstrehite King early on, but I can't really see where he fits into the narrative.

I do like the formal alliance tie and history that you are creating with the marriage, and with the exchanging of symbolic weaponry, especially since it is those symbols that will likely stay remembered in legend and history as the alliance survives. You might consider naming the weapons that are used (is it a hand-axe? a short sword? a javelin?)

I also came across a few typos if you're just looking for some cosmetic fixes.

reamained should be remained (structure)

weilding should be wielding (assets)

I was also a little confused about the difference between the Sceadu, the Mundbyrdians and the Sundorwikians (spelling? I saw it different ways). I tried to look into the individual tribes for info but didn't get much information about the Sceadu. What I saw about the Mundbyrdians did clarify a couple of my questions though, and was very well done!

I'd love for you to post an updated link in the future if you keep building onto the world so I can see how it progresses.